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Nowadays, a increasing number of people concerned about the enhancement of public services. However, whether the government should allocate fund to public services other than waste money on arts is controversial issue. In my view, public service are vital to our life, but spending money on arts is definitely not just waste money.

不看不知道，一看嚇一跳!這短短3句話共53詞的開頭段里，密布著8處語法錯(cuò)誤，這在雅思寫作評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)中的 “語法準(zhǔn)確性”一條上自然會(huì)大打折扣。

下面我們就挨個(gè)來八一八這些看似微小，但卻決定了雅思寫作成敗的細(xì)節(jié)問題，也請(qǐng)各位烤鴨對(duì)號(hào)入座!

【細(xì)節(jié)一】冠詞的使用

1. 原文：Nowadays, a increasing number ofpeople...

診斷：元音單詞increasing前的不定冠詞應(yīng)用an而不是a。這樣的錯(cuò)誤在口語中不容易犯，但寫到紙上時(shí)就容易忽視。所以說，寫完的作文不僅要重看，更要“重讀”，才能借助語感揪出這樣的小錯(cuò)誤。

修改：Nowadays, an increasing number ofpeople...

2. 原文：However, whether the government... on arts is controversial issue.

診斷：issue是可數(shù)名詞，但這里既沒有用冠詞又不是復(fù)數(shù)，顯然是有問題的。

修改：However, whether the government... on arts is a controversial issue.

【細(xì)節(jié)二】名詞單復(fù)數(shù)

3. 原文：However, whether the government should allocate fund to public services ...

診斷：fund表示政府撥款的“資金”，此處應(yīng)該使用復(fù)數(shù)，表示多筆撥款。

修改：However,whether the government should allocate funds topublic services ...

4. 原文：In my view, public service are vitalto our life, but...

診斷：句子主語public service與謂語are不一致，主語是單數(shù)，而謂語是復(fù)數(shù)用法。此處public services泛指“公共服務(wù)”，應(yīng)用復(fù)數(shù)。

修改：In my view, public services are vitalto our life, but...

【細(xì)節(jié)三】動(dòng)詞詞組用法

5. 原文：Nowadays, increasing number of people concernedabout the enhancement of public services.

診斷：動(dòng)詞詞組be concernedabout...表示“對(duì)……關(guān)注”。但這句話中使用時(shí)漏掉了be動(dòng)詞，導(dǎo)致整個(gè)句子語法錯(cuò)誤。

修改：Nowadays, increasing number of people are concerned about the enhancement of public services.

注：中括號(hào)內(nèi)單詞表示已在原文中修改的錯(cuò)誤。下同。

【細(xì)節(jié)四】近似用法混淆

6. 原文：However, whether the government should allocate fund to publicservices other than waste...

診斷：考生原本想用的應(yīng)該是rather than，表示“而不是”，卻錯(cuò)誤地寫成了形式類似的other than，表示“除了……之外”，整句話的意思就改變了。

修改：However,whether the government should allocate fund to public services rather than waste...

【細(xì)節(jié)五】非謂語動(dòng)詞用法

7. 原文：However, whether... to public services than waste money on arts is...

診斷：ratherthan是介詞，后面可接名詞或動(dòng)名詞形式，但此處考生錯(cuò)誤地接了動(dòng)詞原形。

修改：However,whether... to public services than wasting money on arts is...

8. 原文：In my view... but spending money on arts is definitely not just waste money.

診斷：考生想表達(dá)“在藝術(shù)上投資絕不僅僅是浪費(fèi)金錢”，但卻錯(cuò)誤地用動(dòng)詞原形waste作表語，暴露了基本功不扎實(shí)的問題

修改：In myview... but spending money on arts is definitely not just wasting money.

注：除了動(dòng)名詞之外，其他幾種非謂語動(dòng)詞——?jiǎng)釉~不定式、現(xiàn)在分詞、過去分詞等，也是寫作中的重頭戲。如果用得好自然錦上添花，但這些往往也是最容易出錯(cuò)的部分。

【總結(jié)】

看完以上錯(cuò)誤分析，是不是深刻體會(huì)到了“The devil is in the details”這句話的內(nèi)涵?

所謂細(xì)節(jié)決定成敗。要想在雅思寫作中收獲高分，除了玩轉(zhuǎn)各種酷炫的觀點(diǎn)和行文技巧，更要留心語法細(xì)節(jié)，不要讓這些小錯(cuò)誤毀了你的雅思寫作!

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